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How do you make friends with other kids?

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I'm make friends with other kids is the play games with together is very quickly become friends.
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I'm make friends with other kids is the play games with together is very quickly become friends. So I'm many make new friends.
>> I make friends with other kids by playing games together and we quickly become friends by doing this. 

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