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I love to travel anywhere. I want to go somewhere l haven't been go. I have my bucket list. To travel is one of my bucket list. Next year I will go to China. China is a big country. China have many place worth going. I want to go to winnan in China. Winnan in China is very beautiful. Someone said winnan has four seasons like spling. Winnan has beatiful view whenever. I expect to go there.

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Hello Eva,

You did an excellent job with your homework! It¡¯s wonderful that you and your husband are retired now. That means you have more time to travel and make beautiful memories together. Yunnan sounds like a perfect destination for your next adventure. The beautiful scenery and four seasons like spring will surely make your trip even more special.

I can imagine how exciting it must be to plan trips without the stress of work. Traveling gives you the chance to enjoy new places, experience different cultures, and create lasting memories. You and your husband can take your time and enjoy every moment.

You are in such a great position now to explore the world, and I¡¯m sure your travels will be amazing. Keep dreaming and planning, because every trip is a new opportunity to make wonderful memories together. You¡¯re doing great, keep it up!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I love to travel anywhere.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I love traveling everywhere.

I want to go somewhere l haven't been go.

>>I want to go somewhere I haven't been yet.

I have my bucket list.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I have a bucket list.

To travel is one of my bucket list.

>>To travel is one of the items on my bucket list.

Next year I will go to China.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I plan to visit China next year.

China is a big country.

>>CORRECT

OR>>China is a vast country.

China have many place worth going.

>>China has many places worth visiting.

I want to go to winnan in China.

>>I want to go to Yunnan in China.

Winnan in China is very beautiful.

>>Yunnan is very beautiful.

Someone said winnan has four seasons like spling.

>>Someone said Yunnan has four seasons like spring.

Winnan has beatiful view whenever.

>>Yunnan has beautiful views all year round.

I expect to go there.

>>I look forward to going there.

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