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If you could receive one special Christmas gift this year what would it be?

작성자: 오*영
2024-12-12 27

회원님의 영작문

If you could receive one special Christmas gift this year what would it be?

Suprisingly,
My son asked this kind of quesion to me, today's morning.
He asked me which one I wanted to choose healty or lucky
if i could recieve one gift.
So I answered that I wanted to get healty for gift. Because I think that healty equals lucky to getting older people.
Soon my son told me, again.
Once upon a time, There is one painful man.
He received lucky for the gift. so, He could tell some wishes luckly to god . so He wanted a lot of things. For example, He wanted recover from the ill so, he could get healthy.
He wanted much money, so, He was rich.
Result, He could live happily forever.
I laughed at the story and I could understand that I should have chosen the lucky.
However, I won't to change my mind that receving the healthy. Because We can't get healhy suddenly, luckly.
If we want to get more healthier than before ,
then I know that we have to try more things.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Stella! It's probably difficult to choose between being lucky and being healthy. However, I agree with you that being healthy is just as good as being lucky. ^^ Thank you for sharing an interesting story from your son. Have a great weekend!
~T. Jewel
Suprisingly, My son asked this kind of quesion to me, today's morning.
>>Suprisingly, my son asked me this kind of question this morning.
He asked me which one I wanted to choose healty or lucky if i could recieve one gift.
>>He asked me which one I wanted to choose, healthy or lucky, if I could receive one gift.
OR
>>He asked me if I would choose to be healthy or lucky if I could receive one gift.
So I answered that I wanted to get healty for gift.
>>So I answered that I wanted to be healthy as a gift.
Because I think that healty equals lucky to getting older people.
>>Because I think that being healthy is equal to being lucky as you get older.
Soon my son told me, again.
>>Then, my son told me a story.
Once upon a time, There is one painful man.
>>Once upon a time, there was a sick man.
He received lucky for the gift. 
>>He received luck as a gift.
OR
>>He became lucky as a gift.
so, He could tell some wishes luckly to god . 
>>So, he could luckily tell some wishes to God.
so He wanted a lot of things. 
>>He wanted a lot of things.
For example, He wanted recover from the ill so, he could get healthy.
>>For example, he wanted to recover from his illness so he could get healthy.
He wanted much money, so, He was rich.
>>He wanted a lot of money, so he became rich.
Result, He could live happily forever.
>>As a result, he lived happily ever after.
I laughed at the story and I could understand that I should have chosen the lucky.
>>I laughed at the story, and I understood that I should have chosen being lucky.
However, I won't to change my mind that receving the healthy. Because We can't get healhy suddenly, luckly.
>>However, I won't change my mind about being healthy, because we can't suddenly get healthy, luckily.
If we want to get more healthier than before , then I know that we have to try more things.
>>If we want to get healthier than before, then I know we have to try more things.
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