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¡°How My Daily Routine Reflects My Personal Growth¡±

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I always emphasize to my family and friends that time management is important for personal growth.
When we wake up in the morning, we think about what we're going to do in bed today.
And when we sleep, we think about what I did in bed today.
I don't remember what I did when I went to bed and I don't even think about what to do when I wake up in the morning.
Just doing my work mechanically.
I always put my cell phone, car keys, or wallet in my place.
My wife always spends a lot of time searching for her cell phone or keys, looking through her clothes and her bags.
My wife talks to me sometimes.
Honey, call me. I can¡¯t find a cell phone.
If I don't set it up on a plan, I only do what I like.
However, if I set my daily routine, I can keep myself from missing what I have to do even if I don't want to do it.
A person can¡¯t grow only by doing what he or she wants to do.
When I do what I have to do, I will find myself growing up without knowing.

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I always emphasize to my family and friends that time management is important for personal growth.
>> CORRECT


When we wake up in the morning, we think about what we're going to do in bed today.
>> When we wake up in the morning, we think about what we're going to do for the day.


And when we sleep, we think about what I did in bed today.
>> And before we sleep, we think about what we accomplished during the day.


I don't remember what I did when I went to bed and I don't even think about what to do when I wake up in the morning.
>> I don't remember what I accomplished before going to bed, and I don't plan what to do when I wake up in the morning.


Just doing my work mechanically.
>> I just do my work mechanically.


I always put my cell phone, car keys, or wallet in my place.
>> I always put my cell phone, car keys, and wallet in their designated place.


My wife always spends a lot of time searching for her cell phone or keys, looking through her clothes and her bags.
>> CORRECT


My wife talks to me sometimes.
>> CORRECT


Honey, call me. I can¡¯t find a cell phone.
>> Honey, can you call my phone? I can¡¯t find it.


If I don't set it up on a plan, I only do what I like.
>> If I don't follow a plan, I end up doing only what I like.


However, if I set my daily routine, I can keep myself from missing what I have to do even if I don't want to do it.
>> CRRECT


A person can¡¯t grow only by doing what he or she wants to do.
>> CORRECT


When I do what I have to do, I will find myself growing up without knowing.
>> When I do what I have to do, I find myself growing without even realizing it.


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