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should students wear school uniform

작성자: 강*성
2024-12-06 466

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I agree to wear school uniform. Think about it with no uniform. It isn't like a students.If you want to look like a student just wear a school uniform.School is not a party so you don't need to wear like colorful and shiny cloth. School uniform is most basic cloth so you need to wear it.You just think about it if everybody in school wear colorful cloth.I'm sure someone might be dizzy or uncomfortable with your colorful cloth.You need to be respectful in school. If you only wear a colorful someone might be feel strange.It is same when you doesn't focus on your class because you can only focus on your cloth.If you wear school uniform you can focus.This is your school rule to wear a school uniform.Every one should wear a school uniform.How good every students wear a school uniform.Every thing is perfect.You can see your friend well , not confusing . Still there a lot of more reason that I didn't explain but I'm sure you can be well come in your school if you wear a school uniform.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Ryan!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


I agree to wear school uniform. 
>> I agree that students should wear a school uniform. 
Think about it with no uniform. 
>> Think about it if there are no uniforms. 
It isn't like a students.
>> Students don't look like students when they don't wear uniforms.
If you want to look like a student just wear a school uniform.
>> CORRECT!
School is not a party so you don't need to wear like colorful and shiny cloth. 
>> School is not a party place so you don't need to wear colorful and shiny clothes. 
School uniform is most basic cloth so you need to wear it.
>> School uniform is most basic set of clothing, so you need to wear it.
You just think about it if everybody in school wear colorful cloth.
>> Just think about it if everybody in school wears colorful clothes.
I'm sure someone might be dizzy or uncomfortable with your colorful clothes.
>> CORRECT!
You need to be respectful in school. 
>> CORRECT!
If you only wear a colorful someone might be feel strange.
>> If you only wear colorful clothes, someone might feel uncomfortable.
It is same when you doesn't focus on your class because you can only focus on your cloth.
>> Same is true when you couldn't focus on your class because you can only focus on your clothes.
If you wear a school uniform you can focus.
>> CORRECT!
This is your school rule to wear a school uniform.
>> Wearing uniforms is a rule at school.
OR >> Wearing uniforms is one of the school's policy.
Everyone should wear a school uniform.
>> CORRECT!
How good every students wear a school uniform.
>> It looks good when every student wears a school uniform.
Everything is perfect. 
>> CORRECT!
You can see your friend well, not confusing. 
>> You can see your friend well, because it's not confusing. 
Still there a lot of more reason that I didn't explain but I'm sure you can be well come in your school if you wear a school uniform.
>> There are a lot of other reasons that I didnt' explain, but I'm sure you can be welcomed in your school if you wear a school uniform.
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