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How can we make sure our rights are not taken away?

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We have to make sure our rights. Our rights make sure ourselves. Our rights can't make sure other people. When we violated our rights, we have to speak out this situation. Ordinarily we have to know what we have rights. If we didn't know own, we cannot keep own's rights. We have to fulfill one's duty. If there is no duty, there is no right. Sometimes they didn't do duty, but they make sure own rights. I don't like these people. I think that duty have to balance with rights.

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Hello Eva,

You did a great job explaining how important it is to understand and protect our rights. You made a good point about how we must know our own rights in order to protect them. You're absolutely right, if we don't know our rights, it's harder to defend them. I also agree with you that rights and duties should be balanced. It¡¯s important that we do our part and fulfill our responsibilities, as this helps ensure that everyone¡¯s rights are respected. You have a clear understanding of how these two things-- rights and duties-- go hand in hand. Keep up the good work! You're making some really thoughtful observations here.

~Teacher Cathy

 

We have to make sure our rights.

>>We have to protect our rights.

Our rights make sure ourselves.

>>Our rights protect us.

Our rights can't make sure other people.

>>Our rights can't protect others.

When we violated our rights, we have to speak out this situation.

>>When someone violates our rights, we must speak out about the situation.

Ordinarily we have to know what we have rights.

>>Of course, we have to know what our rights are.

If we didn't know own, we cannot keep own's rights.

>>If we don't know our own rights, we cannot keep them.

We have to fulfill one's duty.

>>We have to fulfill our duty.

If there is no duty, there is no right.

>>If there is no duty, there are no rights.

Sometimes they didn't do duty, but they make sure own rights.

>>Sometimes they don't fulfill their duties, but they ensure their own rights.

I don't like these people.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I don't appreciate these people.

I think that duty have to balance with rights.

>>I think that duty has to be balanced with rights.

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