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How do you define possibilities in your life?

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Sometimes my homework title very hard to write. I can't define possibities in my life. I have lived many time. When I was young, I wanted a lot of things. I wanted to have many money, my sons into good University, good house and good car. Now l always want family healthy and ordinary days. I want enjoying my time to do I wanted.

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Hello Eva,

You did really well with your homework! I can see that you put a lot of thought into it, and your answers are great. You¡¯ve shared some really valuable thoughts about what¡¯s important to you now in life, like family and health. That¡¯s something many people come to realize as they grow older, so it¡¯s wonderful that you already understand that. I¡¯m sure you can continue answering these kinds of questions easily because you have such good ideas and insights. Keep it up! You¡¯re doing a great job, and I¡¯m really proud of your progress.

~Teacher Cathy

 

Sometimes my homework title very hard to write.

>>Sometimes, the title of my homework is very hard to write.

I can't define possibities in my life.

>>I can¡¯t define the possibilities in my life.

I have lived many time.

>>I have lived for a long time.

When I was young, I wanted a lot of things.

>>CORRECT

OR>>When I was young, I wanted to have many things.

I wanted to have many money, my sons into good University, good house and good car.

>>I wanted to have a lot of money, send my sons to a good university, and have a good house and car.

Now l always want family healthy and ordinary days.

>>Now, I only want my family to be healthy and for us to live ordinary days.

I want enjoying my time to do I wanted.

>>I want to enjoy my time doing what I want.

 

 

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