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A) The definition of health as defined by the WHO is ¡°Health is a dynamic state of complete physical, mental, spiritual and social well-being and not merely the absence of disease or infirmity.¡±
The data shows whether the mental health is as important as the physical health.
The report on the cause of death in Korea in 2023 is as follows.
Suicide is the number one cause of death for teenagers to people in their 30s.
Cancer is the cause of death after the 40s.
If mental health is poor, the quality of life will inevitably deteriorate.
When there is a mental health problem, it harms not only the family but also the community in which they live, unlike people with poor physical health.
There are cases in which people who have no relationship are hurt.
However, the problem is that it is not revealed on the outside.
It's sad that either way it's not healthy.
However, the number of patients with mental health problems continues to increase over time, and the harm to society continues to grow.

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Hi David. I just wanted to say I had such a great time talking to you about health issues and the remedies you do at home for our last class. It was really insightful and enjoyable to hear your perspective! I also really admire how you still manage to diligently answer your homework amidst everything. Keep up the amazing work! You¡¯re doing great! 


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The definition of health as defined by the WHO is ¡°Health is a dynamic state of complete physical, mental, spiritual and social well-being and not merely the absence of disease or infirmity.¡±
>> CORRECT

The data shows whether the mental health is as important as the physical health.
>> The data shows that mental health is as important as physical health.

The report on the cause of death in Korea in 2023 is as follows.
>> CORRECT

Suicide is the number one cause of death for teenagers to people in their 30s.
>> CORRECT

Cancer is the cause of death after the 40s.
>> Cancer becomes the leading cause of death for those in their 40s and older.

If mental health is poor, the quality of life will inevitably deteriorate.
>> CORRECT

When there is a mental health problem, it harms not only the family but also the community in which they live, unlike people with poor physical health.
>> When there is a mental health problem, it harms not only the family but also the community in which they live, unlike physical health issues.

There are cases in which people who have no relationship are hurt.
>> There are cases where unrelated people are also affected.

However, the problem is that it is not revealed on the outside.
>> CORRECT or However, the problem is that it is not outwardly visible.

It's sad that either way it's not healthy.
>> CORRECT or It's sad that, in either case, it is not healthy.

However, the number of patients with mental health problems continues to increase over time, and the harm to society continues to grow.
>> CORRECT
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