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Do you think the convenience of being constantly connected has made us more productive?

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I think being constantly connected could be more productive because we can have more time to work and talk with each other.
However, on the contrary, ceaseless connection makes individuals feel exhausted and could lead to less degree of efficiency.
If needed, concentrated short quick connection would be the best to everyone.

Thank you for keeping correcting me with the same pronunciation&grammar problem for these days! I love it.
My brain is not as when I was young, and I am very bad at memorizing something nowadays.... 😂...
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Have a good day and weekend!😊

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Hey there, Ms. Anna! Wonderful thoughts! You¡¯ve really captured both the pros and cons of constant connectivity. It¡¯s so true that finding a balance with focused, meaningful interactions can help us stay productive and avoid burnout. Thank you for always putting in the effort with your compositions---I¡¯m always excited to read your thoughtful and insightful responses. Keep up the great work!
~T. Jenna

I think being constantly connected could be more productive because we can have more time to work and talk with each other.
Correct, or
>>I believe that perpetual connectivity has the potential to enhance productivity by creating additional opportunities for work and meaningful communication.
However, on the contrary, ceaseless connection makes individuals feel exhausted and could lead to less degree of efficiency.
>>However, ceaseless connection makes individuals feel exhausted and could lead to a lower level of efficiency.
OR
>>However, non-stop connectivity can quickly lead to burnout and a noticeable drop in productivity.
If needed, concentrated short quick connection would be the best to everyone.
>> If needed, concentrated, short, and quick connections would be best for everyone.
OR
>>When necessary, brief yet focused interactions are likely to be the most effective approach for all parties involved.

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Thank you for keeping correcting me with the same pronunciation&grammar problem for these days! I love it.
My brain is not as when I was young, and I am very bad at memorizing something nowadays.... 
>>Aw, you¡¯re so sweet! 😊 Don¡¯t worry, we all have those moments, and I¡¯m just glad I can be here to help.  And hey, your brain is still amazing—it's just busy doing so much more now. Keep going, you¡¯re doing great! 💪✨

Hope for seeing you soon again~~
Have a good day and weekend!
>>I hope to see you soon too! I hope your trip to your home country is filled with beautiful memories and warm moments. Enjoy every bit of it, and I can¡¯t wait to hear all about your adventures when you¡¯re back! Safe travels and have an amazing time! 

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