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Q) Write about why gift-giving is your love language.

A) There are many ways I can give my heart to the person I love.
I want to give my most precious thing to her when I give my love to her.
I think my time, my heart is the most precious, but unfortunately, I can't show her directly and sometimes she might think it's fake.
Money is precious to everyone.
There is a saying in the Bible, "Where your money is, your heart is."
Giving a gift to a person I love contains both my heart and my time.
It contains my heart thinking about what gift to give her, and it contains my time to go to the shopping mall to buy a gift and choose a gift.
When she see the gift after removing the wrapping paper, I think maybe that she can also see my heart contained with the gift.
The gift-giving is my love language.

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Hi David!


I¡¯m so touched by your answers. They truly show how real and deep your love for your wife is. Your warmth shines through, and your skill in writing is remarkable. Keep it up!


~ Teacher Lia



There are many ways I can give my heart to the person I love.
>> CORRECT

I want to give my most precious thing to her when I give my love to her.
>> CORRECT

I think my time, my heart is the most precious, but unfortunately, I can't show her directly and sometimes she might think it's fake.
>> I think my time and my heart are the most precious, but unfortunately, I can't show her directly, and sometimes she might think it's fake.

Money is precious to everyone.
>> CORRECT

There is a saying in the Bible, "Where your money is, your heart is."
>> CORRECT

Giving a gift to a person I love contains both my heart and my time.
>> CORRECT

It contains my heart thinking about what gift to give her, and it contains my time to go to the shopping mall to buy a gift and choose a gift.
>> It contains my heart, thinking about what gift to give her, and it contains my time spent going to the shopping mall to buy and choose a gift.

When she see the gift after removing the wrapping paper, I think maybe that she can also see my heart contained with the gift.
>> When she sees the gift after removing the wrapping paper, I think maybe she can also see my heart contained in the gift.

The gift-giving is my love language.
>> Therefore, gift-giving is my love language.


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