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What makes a particular song or artist special to you?

작성자: 배*빈
2024-11-20 959

회원님의 영작문

The situation(background?) when I listen to a song makes a particular song to me. For example, I listened to a song called 산책 in the China during studying as an exchange student. I was so tired studying Chinese at that time, so I often took a walk alone and listened to soft music. And 산책 is one of the soft music I listened to. The song let me release and comfort. Currently, When I was tired or complicated my feelings, I’m also listen to the song. Therefore, the song became a particular song to me.
And I am often interested an artist singing the song which was already became a special song to me. The singer’s voice is also important part. If the singer is handsome and pretty, l liked to he or she much better!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Yun Bin,

Thank you for your homework submission. I enjoyed reading about the song “Strolling” and how it became meaningful to you during your time in China. Your explanation of how music can provide comfort in difficult moments shows a deep understanding of the emotional connection we can have with songs. It's clear that the background and the context in which we listen to a song can make it particularly special. Additionally, your insight into how an artist's voice and appearance can further enhance your appreciation for their music was well expressed. Keep up the excellent work!

~Teacher Cathy

 

The situation(background?) when I listen to a song makes a particular song to me.

>>The situation when I listen to a song makes that particular song special to me.

For example, I listened to a song called 산책 in the China during studying as an exchange student.

>>For example, I listened to a song called 'Strolling' in China while studying as an exchange student.

I was so tired studying Chinese at that time, so I often took a walk alone and listened to soft music.

>>I was so tired from studying Chinese at that time, so I often took walks alone and listened to soft music.

And 산책 is one of the soft music I listened to.

>>CORRECT

OR>>And 'Strolling' is one of the soft songs I listened to.

The song let me release and comfort.

>>The song helped me relax and feel comforted.

Currently, When I was tired or complicated my feelings, I’m also listen to the song.

>>Currently, when I'm tired or my feelings are complicated, I also listen to the song.

Therefore, the song became a particular song to me.

>>Therefore, the song became special to me.

And I am often interested an artist singing the song which was already became a special song to me.

>>I am often interested in the artist who sings a song that has already become special to me.

The singer’s voice is also important part.

>>The singer's voice is also an important part.

If the singer is handsome and pretty, l liked to he or she much better!

>>If the singer is handsome or pretty, I like him or her even more!

OR>>If the singer is good looking, I would like them even more!

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