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What are your thoughts on people who swim across big bodies of water?

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I think the across big bodies of water people is very amazing because swim across big bodies of water is very dangerous.
But dangerous swim across of water overcome is very amazing.

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                                   What are your thoughts on people who swim across big bodies of water?


I think the across big bodies of water people is very amazing because swim across big bodies of water is very dangerous.
>> I think people who swim across big bodies of water are amazing because the waters are very dangerous. 

But dangerous swim across of water overcome is very amazing.
>> It's amazing how they successfully swim across such hazardous waters. 
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