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ESSAY: Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Much of a country's development is its economic development. Presidents put great efforts into developing a country's economy, and sometimes they fail to develop it, leading to a tragic end.
However, economic development is not all about national development. Other types of development are also important developments.
For example, there is environmental development. If you only care about economic development, you should also think about the development of the environment because it destroys the environment a lot.
However, I think that a state is a union of people, and its purpose is to live well in abundance. So, I think economic development is more important than anything else.

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Hi there Lee! It's been a long time since I last checked your essay! I was surprised to check your essays in a row. Thank you! Keep it up! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Much of a country's development is its economic development.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Presidents put great efforts into developing a country's economy, and sometimes they fail to develop it, leading to a tragic end.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, economic development is not all about national development.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Other types of development are also important developments.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
>>>  Other types of development are also important.
For example, there is an environmental development.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 If you only care about economic development, you should also think about the development of the environment because it destroys the environment a lot.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, I think that a state is a union of people, and its purpose is to live well in abundance. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
So, I think economic development is more important than anything else.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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