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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Writing task: What do you think most people are worried about these days and what advice would you give them?

Answer:
It's most worriedabout marriage these day, everyone wants to get married but they're old or they don't have a boyfriend or it's hard to get married even if they have a boyfriend.
I'm either coverded or told to look at the merits, but it's not easy for everyone.

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Hello, Ms. Nala! I agree with your point. Marriage is one of the most critical and stress-inducing things these days caused by many factors such as financial concerns and changing social norms. 
-T. Sonny
It's most worried about marriage these day, everyone wants to get married but they're old or they don't have a boyfriend or it's hard to get married even if they have a boyfriend.
>>Most people worry about marriage these days because everyone wants to get married but can't due to old age or may also be due to not having someone to marry though it's also a struggle to get married even though you are in a relationship.  
I'm either coverded or told to look at the merits, but it's not easy for everyone.
>>I'm either covered or told to look at the merits, but it's not easy for everyone.


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