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Q) "Why Regular Dental Checkups Are Important?¡°

A) I always emphasize regular check-ups for patients in my clinic.
However, the intervals of regular checkups all varies from patient to patient.
From as short as three months to as long as one year.
The reason why regular checkups are important is not just to find diseases that occur in the oral cavity.
It is important to check how much the patient is making effort for his or her oral care.
If the patient's efforts are insufficient, of course, he or she should come to me frequently for examination and education.
However, if the patient is doing well in his or her oral care, he does not have to come often.
Just as an English teacher helps my English level improve, I am also helping the patient improve his or her own management skills through regular dental checkups.

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Hi David! I¡¯m truly impressed by your responses for this homework. They¡¯re well-structured and concise. I also love your choice of words. There were quite relevant for the responses. Excellent work, keep it up!
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I always emphasize regular check-ups for patients in my clinic.
>> CORRECT

However, the intervals of regular checkups all varies from patient to patient.
>> However, the intervals of regular checkups all vary from patient to patient.

From as short as three months to as long as one year.
>> These intervals can range from as short as three months to as long as one year.

The reason why regular checkups are important is not just to find diseases that occur in the oral cavity.
>> The importance of regular checkups is not limited to identifying diseases in the oral cavity.

It is important to check how much the patient is making effort for his or her oral care.
>> CORRECT

If the patient's efforts are insufficient, of course, he or she should come to me frequently for examination and education.
>> CORRECT 
>> OR If the patient's efforts are insufficient, they should visit me frequently for examinations and education.

However, if the patient is doing well in his or her oral care, he does not have to come often.
>> However, if the patient is maintaining good oral care, they do not need to visit as often.

Just as an English teacher helps my English level improve, I am also helping the patient improve his or her own management skills through regular dental checkups.
>> Just as an English teacher helps me improve my English, I help patients improve their own oral care management skills through regular dental checkups.
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