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Where do you think is the best place to live in South Korea nowadays?

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Seoul is very nice place to live with family. There are a lot of fun sites to enjoy activities such as cycling across the city, walking in the beutiful street with trees, and even sports leisure in the Han-river. I recommend another small city nearby Seoul, Namyangju. My mother and sister lived there, because it is close to Seoul and not so expensive to live in the apartment. You can see a fantastatic landscape of North stream of Han-river in Namyangju. I really love the sunset of Han-river, so I hope to live there in the future (after my kids are growing up).

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Hello, Dr. David!

Seoul City has it all. From work places to recreation, medical and sports facilities among many others, it is the place to be. Yet, its crowded nature makes it difficult to live there quietly and pollution-free. Therefore, I agree that the suburbs are still the more livable areas devoid of noise and excessive traffic and pollution.

It seems like you like the serene sunset by the river. Thus, find that spot to live someday soon.

Below, I segmented your sentences so you can easily follow the grammar suggestions underlined in a few of your sentences. Take note of spellings, articles 'a' and 'the', and dictions to make your sentences even better. 

Thank you for this homework answer in spite of your super hectic schedule!

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Seoul is very nice place to live with family. There are a lot of fun sites to enjoy activities such as cycling across the city, walking in the beutiful street with trees, and even sports leisure in the Han-river. 
>> Seoul is a very nice place to live with family. There are a lot of fun sites to enjoy activities such as cycling across the city, walking in the beautiful street with trees, and even sports leisure (in/ nearby) the Han-river.

I recommend another small city nearby Seoul, Namyangju. My mother and sister lived there, because it is close to Seoul and not so expensive to live in the apartment. 
>I recommend another small city nearby Seoul, Namyangju. My mother and sister live there, because it is close to Seoul and not so expensive to live in the apartment. Ver good sentences!

You can see a fantastatic landscape of North stream of Han-river in Namyangju. I really love the sunset of Han-river, so I hope to live there in the future (after my kids are growing up).
>> You can see a fantastic landscape of the northern stream of Han River in Namyangju. I really love the sunset of Han-river, so I hope to live there in the future (after my kids are grown up).
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