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[What is the best thing about your birthplace?]

My birthplace is Wonju, the biggest city in Gangwon-do.
Gangwon-do is not a very developed city in Korea because it has many mountains and the roads are inconvenient.
When I was born there, it was a boring city without cultural places such as theaters, department stores, museums, and so on.
I have been lived there until 14 years old, then I moved to the bigger city with my family.
Then, I have never been there until now.
However, I heard that Wonju is quite close to Seoul and recently the city has developed so much.
Now, there are many companies because it takes one and half hours from Seoul.
The price for ground and building is relatively cheaper than in Seoul.
I liked to walk around the huge river close to my home.
I have many memories with my family and friends.
I want to go there again with my husband and babies.

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Good evening, Nicole!
Your description of Wonju paints a clear picture of its transformation! It¡¯s nice that you have such fond memories of your birthplace and hope to revisit it with your family.
~ Teacher Trixia

CONTENT:
My birthplace is Wonju, the biggest city in Gangwon-do.
- My birthplace is Wonju, the largest city in Gangwon Province.
Gangwon-do is not a very developed city in Korea because it has many mountains and the roads are inconvenient.
- Gangwon Province is not a very developed region in Korea because it has many mountains and the roads are inconvenient.
When I was born there, it was a boring city without cultural places such as theaters, department stores, museums, and so on.
- When I was born there, it was a rather dull city without cultural attractions like theaters, department stores, and museums.
I have been lived there until 14 years old, then I moved to the bigger city with my family.
- I lived there until I was 14 years old, then I moved to a larger city with my family.
Then, I have never been there until now.
- I haven't been back there since then.
However, I heard that Wonju is quite close to Seoul and recently the city has developed so much.
- However, I¡¯ve heard that Wonju is now quite close to Seoul and has developed a lot recently.
Now, there are many companies because it takes one and half hours from Seoul.
- Now, there are many companies because it is only one and a half hours from Seoul.
The price for ground and building is relatively cheaper than in Seoul.
- The price of land and buildings is relatively cheaper than in Seoul.
I liked to walk around the huge river close to my home.
- I enjoyed walking around the large river near my home.
I have many memories with my family and friends.
- I have many fond memories with my family and friends.
I want to go there again with my husband and babies.
- CORRECT.
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