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Which among your stuff do you need to throw away?

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2024-11-12 14

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First, I liked to collecting the cute dolls.
So I was sleeping with my dolls or playing with my cuty dolls.
But now, a piano is full of dolls in my house .
I haven't played with my dolls nowadays.
So I need to throw away.
But I can't do that because there are a lot of memories of my childhood.
Second, I need to throw away my middle and high school's uniform.
They don't need to me no more and they just take up space.
But, there are also a lot of memories of my childhood so I can't throw away.

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Hello Nicole,
Thanks for submitting your composition. Practice more so you can improve your writing skills faster. Have a great day!
~ T. Demi ^^

First, I liked to collecting the cute dolls.
>> First, I liked collecting cute dolls.
So I was sleeping with my dolls or playing with my cuty dolls.
>> So I was sleeping or playing with my cute dolls.
But now, a piano is full of dolls in my house.
>> But now, the piano is already full of dolls in my house.
I haven't played with my dolls nowadays.
>> I don't play with my dolls nowadays.
So I need to throw away.
>> So, I need to throw them away.
But I can't do that because there are a lot of memories of my childhood.
>> But I can't do it because they have a lot of memories from my childhood.
Second, I need to throw away my middle and high school's uniform.
>> Secondly, I think I need to throw away my middle and high school uniform.
They don't need to me no more and they just take up space.
>> I don't need them anymore and they just take up space.
But, there are also a lot of memories of my childhood so I can't throw away.
>>However, there are many memories from my childhood, which is why I can't throw them away.
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