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Has your country had a female leader? Are female leaders different from male ones? How?

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2024-11-09 84

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There are not as many female leaders as you might expect. We have still much more male leaders than female ones. We recognize that there is wrong with this unbalance of gender in leadership and have tried to improve this issue. We’ve come a long way about it, but not as much as we have expected. We still have a long way to go about it. I attributed this unfairness to our long-standing perspective which must have formed under the Confucianism. I don’t think that female is inferior to male per se. Moreover, I know many women who have done their best at work as well as at home. But In addition to our perverted view for women, circumstances where we raise children might have pushed many women out of work. If one couple is asked who is in charge of raising a child without appropriate support, woman would choose a child and leave her work for good because it is almost impossible to get back to her career after some years of raising a child.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Mr. Steve! I agree that most societies were more inclined to patriarchy, especially in the past. But, these days, some conditions have changed. Though, I believe that leadership is ultimately shaped by various factors and not by gender alone.
-T. Sonny
There are not as many female leaders as you might expect. 
>>Correct!
We have still much more male leaders than female ones. 
>>We still have more male leaders than female ones. 
We recognize that there is wrong with this unbalance of gender in leadership and have tried to improve this issue. 
>>We recognize that there is a gender leadership gap and have tried to improve this issue. 
We’ve come a long way about it, but not as much as we have expected. We still have a long way to go about it. 
>>We’ve come a long way, but not as much as we expected.
We still have a long way to go about it. 
>>We have a long journey ahead of us.
I attributed this unfairness to our long-standing perspective which must have formed under the Confucianism. 
>>I attributed this unfairness to our long-standing perspective which must have formed under Confucianism. 
I don’t think that female is inferior to male per se. 
>>I don’t think that females are inferior to males per se. 
Moreover, I know many women who have done their best at work as well as at home. 
>>Moreover, I know numerous women who have done their best on the job and in the household 
But In addition to our perverted view for women, circumstances where we raise children might have pushed many women out of work. 
>>But in addition to our corrupted perception of women, child-bearing-related circumstances might have hindered many women from working. 
If one couple is asked who is in charge of raising a child without appropriate support, woman would choose a child and leave her work for good because it is almost impossible to get back to her career after some years of raising a child.
>>If a couple were to be asked who is in charge of raising a child without much support, the woman would choose the child and leave work for good because it is practically impossible to get back to her career after some years of raising a child.
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