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How do you typically celebrate your achievements

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When I was achieved with the good assessment in the company, ususally I celebrated with my family.In the weekend, we are buying food and beverage,sometimes we bought the mini cake. Our celebration is so small, but there are in big happiness and comfort. Their big support makes me talented and giving me huge energy to live my life.

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Hello Gloria,

Thank you for sharing how you celebrate your achievements! I love how you celebrate with your family, and it¡¯s wonderful to see how much support they give you. Your celebration may be small, but the happiness and comfort you feel are truly special.

Keep up the great work, and continue striving for success. You¡¯re doing an amazing job, and I¡¯m proud of you!

~Teacher Cathy

 

When I was achieved with the good assessment in the company, ususally I celebrated with my family.

>>When I get a good achievement at the company, I usually celebrate with my family.

In the weekend, we are buying food and beverage,sometimes we bought the mini cake.

>>On the weekend, we buy food and beverages, and sometimes we buy mini cakes.

Our celebration is so small, but there are in big happiness and comfort.

>>Our celebration is small, but it is filled with great happiness and comfort.

Their big support makes me talented and giving me huge energy to live my life.

>>Their strong support makes me talented and gives me the energy to live my life.

 

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