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In what ways does immigration benefit a country?

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Immigration can help alleviate the labor shortage in some area, such as agriculture where young people don¡¯t want to work any more. Now without foreign workers, many farms can¡¯t work properly. Moreover, immigration can contribute to measures against the decrease of population. Immigrants are more likely to have more children than Korean young couples who are apt to focus on their lives then child raising. Lastly, immigrants can help Korea more international enough to attract foreign investment. which can end up improving our system to the world standard.
On the contrary, as you might have expected, immigration can bring about new challenges of social problems, such as xenophobia or racism among us. Nevertheless, I think immigration has more benefits than disadvantages.

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Hello, Mr. Steve! I agree that immigration can positively impact a nation. Korea might consider this to counteract the aging population and be able to maintain economic stability.
-T. Sonny
Immigration can help alleviate the labor shortage in some area, such as agriculture where young people don¡¯t want to work any more. 
>>Immigration can help alleviate the labor shortage in some areas, such as agriculture which does not appeal to the young generation anymore.
Now without foreign workers, many farms can¡¯t work properly. 
>>Correct!                   
Moreover, immigration can contribute to measures against the decrease of population. 
>>Moreover, immigration can contribute to the measures taken to tackle the declining population.
Immigrants are more likely to have more children than Korean young couples who are apt to focus on their lives then child raising. 
>>Immigrants are more likely to have more children than young Korean couples who are apt to focus on their lives rather than child-rearing. 
Lastly, immigrants can help Korea more international enough to attract foreign investment. which can end up improving our system to the world standard.
>>Lastly, immigrants can help Korea become more globalized to attract foreign investments which can result in the heightening of our system to the global standard.
On the contrary, as you might have expected, immigration can bring about new challenges of social problems, such as xenophobia or racism among us. 
>>Correct!
Nevertheless, I think immigration has more benefits than disadvantages.
>>Correct!
OR. Nevertheless, I think immigration's benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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