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자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
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담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

What do you want to include in your ideal fitness program?

작성자: 김*린
2024-11-06 288

회원님의 영작문

I want inbody appliance in my house to check my body everyday morning. I sometimes check when I see an inbody appliance outside like local district office, gym, act. Actually some people say it's not good that checking body with inbody after exercise or having a meal. Therefore It is difficult to use inbody outside. If I have a inbody appliance in my house, I would check my voulmn of muscle, fat, and weight. To be honest, I always check my weight whenever I wake up in the morning. However weight is not that exact how I am healthy, so I need specific appliance too.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey, Lin! Thanks for sharing your thoughts! It's great that you're mindful of your health. Having an InBody at home sounds like a good way to track your muscle, fat, and weight more accurately.
~T. Jenna

I want inbody appliance in my house to check my body everyday morning. 
>>I want an InBody device in my house to check my body every morning.
OR
>>I would like to have an InBody device in my home to monitor my body composition every morning.
I sometimes check when I see an inbody appliance outside like local district office, gym, act. 
>>I sometimes check it when I see an InBody device outside, such as at a local district office, gym, etc.
OR
>>Occasionally, I take the opportunity to use an InBody device when I encounter one outside, such as at a local district office, gym, or other public venues.
Actually some people say it's not good that checking body with inbody after exercise or having a meal. 
>>Actually, some people say that it's not good to check your body with an InBody device after exercising or having a meal.
OR
>>Actually, some argue that it's inadvisable to assess your body using an InBody device immediately after exercising or eating.
Therefore It is difficult to use inbody outside. 
>>Therefore, it is difficult to use the InBody device outside.
OR
>>Consequently, utilizing the InBody device outdoors proves to be quite challenging.
If I have a inbody appliance in my house, I would check my voulmn of muscle, fat, and weight. 
>>If I had an InBody device in my house, I would check my muscle volume, fat, and weight.
OR
>>Should I have an InBody device in my home, I would regularly monitor my muscle mass, body fat, and weight.
To be honest, I always check my weight whenever I wake up in the morning. 
Correct, or
>>To be honest, I always weigh myself first thing in the morning.
However weight is not that exact how I am healthy, so I need specific appliance too.
>>However, weight is not an exact indicator of how healthy I am, so I also need a specific device.
OR
>>However, weight alone is not a precise measure of my overall health, which is why I also require a specialized device.
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