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Today I went ST. Johnsbury Academy Jeju for 'Jeju International School 2024 Fall English Camp. This camp in progress for 5 dats in week. Todayis second day of this camp. English camp's class is so funny. Okay I'll introduss our team.
Our team name is team 12 and we have three teacher. First T. Victoria, she is a home teacher in our class. Second is T. Ms.Anshe is korean,so she help us when we feel difficultat something. Last teacher is T.Eden(I don't know right spelling of his name;;). He is high school student from SJA. And we have 20 team member.
Finally the most important of this camp is lunch. There are two menu, so I can choose it. How fantastic it is!

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Today I went ST. Johnsbury Academy Jeju for 'Jeju International School 2024 Fall English Camp. 
>> Today, I went to St. Johnsbury Academy Jeju for 'Jeju International School 2024 Fall English Camp. 

This camp in progress for 5 dats in week. Todayis second day of this camp.
>> This camp will run for 5 consecutive days and today is the second day. 

English camp's class is so funny. 
>> The camp's English class is very fun. 

Okay I'll introduss our team.
>> Now, let me introduce my team. 

Our team name is team 12 and we have three teacher. 
>> We are a team of 12 people and we have three teachers. 

First T. Victoria, she is a home teacher in our class. 
>> First is T. Victoria who is our homeroom teacher. 

Second is T. Ms.Anshe is korean,so she help us when we feel difficultat something. 
>> Second is T. Anshe who is Korean and helps us when we need it. 

Last teacher is T.Eden(I don't know right spelling of his name;;). He is high school student from SJA. 
>> Last is T. Eden who is a high school student from SJA (I'm not sure if I got the spelling right.).

And we have 20 team member.
>> And there are other 20 members of the team. 

Finally the most important of this camp is lunch. 
>> Finally, the most important part of this camp is lunch. 

There are two menu, so I can choose it. 
>> There are two menus so I can choose what I like. 

How fantastic it is!
>> CORRECT~~

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