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What was the best book or story you\'ve ever read? What was it about?

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I think my best book is 'the history of life' this book tell history of life from 4.6 billion years ago to the present.
So 'the history of life's fun! I recommend you read it

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                        What was the best book or story you've ever read? What was it about?


I think my best book is 'the history of life' this book tell history of life from 4.6 billion years ago to the present.
>> I think the best book I've ever read is 'The History of Life', which tells the history of life from 4.6 billion years ago to the present.

So 'the history of life's fun! 
>> So 'The History of Life' is fun! 

I recommend you read it. 
>> OR: I think it's worth reading. 
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