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Do you ever think that some music is just noise?

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I think that some music is just noise and rock music includes that.

Because I often listen to music while I¡¯m hard and gloomy. So soft music effectively helps me to comfort and get a energy more than the rock music which is a piece of noise music.

I think that lyrics is also very important thing as well as melody while I listen to music. But rock music doesn¡¯t have any meaningful lyrics and I don¡¯t understand that.

Also, rock music singers overall have a tough voice and enjoy shouting.
I am sensitive a loud sounds. For example, I¡¯m often surprised when I hear the car¡¯s horn or motorcycle riding noise. So, I can¡¯t withstand a loud of rock music.

But I think rock music is also cool music, just not my style.

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Hello Yun Bin,

Thank you for your homework! You did a great job sharing your thoughts about music. I appreciate how you explained your feelings about soft music and rock music. Your writing shows clear ideas and personal insights!

Remember, it¡¯s perfectly okay to have your own taste in music. Keep expressing your thoughts like this; it¡¯s a wonderful way to share your feelings and connect with others.

Great work, and I look forward to your next assignment!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think that some music is just noise and rock music includes that.

>>I think that some music is just noise and rock music falls into that category.

Because I often listen to music while I¡¯m hard and gloomy.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Because I often listen to music when I'm feeling down or gloomy.

So soft music effectively helps me to comfort and get a energy more than the rock music which is a piece of noise music.

>>So, soft music helps me feel comforted and energized more than rock music, which I see as just noise.

I think that lyrics is also very important thing as well as melody while I listen to music.

>>I believe that lyrics are just as important as melody when I listen to music.

But rock music doesn¡¯t have any meaningful lyrics and I don¡¯t understand that.

>>CORRECT

OR>>However, I don¡¯t think rock music has meaningful lyrics, and I find that hard to understand.

Also, rock music singers overall have a tough voice and enjoy shouting.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Also, rock music singers usually have strong voices and like to shout.

I am sensitive a loud sounds.

>>I am sensitive to loud sounds.

For example, I¡¯m often surprised when I hear the car¡¯s horn or motorcycle riding noise.

>>CORRECT

OR>>For instance, I'm frequently taken aback by the sound of a car horn or the noise of a motorcycle.

So, I can¡¯t withstand a loud of rock music.

>>So, I can't withstand loud rock music.

But I think rock music is also cool music, just not my style.

>>CORRECT

OR>>But I think rock music is also very cool, it just isn't my style.

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