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I want to start cooking class.
Because one of my dreams was being a cook.
I always watching a type of cooking TV program. It is always interesting.
And I like to helping my mom when she is cooking.
I was really happy when I cook a delicious food for my lovers and they say to me 'It is delicious'.
When I have time to study cooking in professional, I really have a confidence to particiapte hard.

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Hello Nicole,
You did great today. I hope you can attend cooking classes in the future too. Fighting!
~ T. Demi ^^

I want to start cooking class.
>> I want to start attending cooking classes.
Because one of my dreams was being a cook.
>> Because one of my dreams was to become a cook.
I always watching a type of cooking TV program. It is always interesting.
>> I always watch cooking TV programs and it is always interesting.
And I like to helping my mom when she is cooking.
>> And I like to help my mom when she is cooking.
I was really happy when I cook a delicious food for my lovers and they say to me 'It is delicious'.
>> I am really happy when I cook delicious food for my loved ones and hear them say it's delicious.
When I have time to study cooking in professional, I really have a confidence to particiapte hard.
>> If I have time to study professional cooking, I feel confident about participating in it.
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