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Q: What are the advantages and disadvantages of working out at the gym?
A: I think the advantage of working out at the gym is people can do more kinds of trainings.
If people don't go to the gym, they usually only can do the trainings which don't require machines.
And I think the disadvantage of the gym is it might be far from home.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes:

1. I think the advantage of working out at the gym is people can do more kinds of trainings.
>>CORRECT!

2. If people don't go to the gym, they usually only can do the trainings which don't require machines.
>>If people don't go to the gym, they can only do the trainings which don't require machines.

3. And I think the disadvantage of the gym is it might be far from home.
>>CORRECT!

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