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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Writing task: How do we avoid stress in the workplace?

Answer :
I think we can't perfectly avoid a stress in the workplace but we can less a stress that listen music of your favorite musician or leave the stressful situation a moment.

In my case, I have work music play list fits the situation. If I have a lot of work piled up listen dance and hiphop music,If I having hard time because co-workers listen ballad and classical music.

Especially, when I having hard time because co-workers, I often come to get some fresh air after listen music. I do this, I feel a little calm down.

I try not to stress too much about situations I can't change.

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Hello, Ms. Nala! Music is an effective stress reliever for me as well. Also, the last line you wrote was something I have learned recently and has changed my mindset since then. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
I think we can't perfectly avoid a stress in the workplace but we can less a stress that listen music of your favorite musician or leave the stressful situation a moment.
>>I think we cannot completely avoid stress in the workplace but we can lessen stress by listening to the music of my favorite musician or setting the stressful situation aside.
In my case, I have work music play list fits the situation. 
>>In my case, I have a work music playlist that fits the situation. 
If I have a lot of work piled up listen dance and hiphop music, 
>>If I have a lot of work piled up, I listen to dance and hip-hop music, 
If I having hard time because co-workers listen ballad and classical music.
>>If I'm having a hard time because of my co-workers, I listen to ballads and classical music.
Especially, when I having hard time because co-workers, I often come to get some fresh air after listen music. 
>>Also when I am having a hard time because of my co-workers, I particularly like getting some fresh air after listening to music. 
I do this, I feel a little calm down.
>>Whenever I do this, I feel a little calm.
I try not to stress too much about situations I can't change.
>>I try not to stress out too much about situations I can't change.
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