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I believe that keeping healthy is an important investment in the present and uncertain future, so it has to cost much. Those who have made much efforts for their health enjoy healthy old age without huge costs for expensive medicine, hospital bills, and caregiver. But, those who haven't worked hard and invested for their health suffer from severe sickness and have a tough old age like my mom.

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Hello, Gi Yean!
I totally agree that maintaining our health and doing things that can make us healthier are investments for the future. I often hear many older people encouraging the younger generation to start living healthily before it's too late. However, many younger people believe that they only live once, so they want to live recklessly, disregarding the future.
- T. Caitlyn
I believe that keeping healthy is an important investment in the present and uncertain future, so it has to cost much. 
>> CORRECT
Those who have made much efforts for their health enjoy healthy old age without huge costs for expensive medicine, hospital bills, and caregiver. 
>> Those who have made a lot of effort for their health enjoy a healthy old age without huge costs for expensive medicine, hospital bills, and caregivers.
But, those who haven't worked hard and invested for their health suffer from severe sickness and have a tough old age like my mom.
>> But those who haven't worked hard and invested in their health suffer from severe sickness and have a tough old age like my mom.
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