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Hello, Jewel.
The weather is not normall as last year.
It¡¯s sunny, today.
It is not absolutely winter, but fall.
So, I got a vaccination shot with my husband.
I felt like on a date with him.
But I had to work during afternoon.
I attatched the picture as homework.
Plz, check uploaded a file.
Thank you so much. Have a nice day.
😀

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Hi, Stella! Understanding is indeed a very valuable lesson in life and not everyone is willing or able to understand others. Thank you for doing your homework. I am happy to know your thoughts on this topic. ^^ Have a great day!

~T. Jewel

I think that the most valuable lesson for someone getting old is understanding. 

>>I think that the most valuable lesson for someone growing older is understanding.

For example, We can think that it is possible to happen when someone makes mistakes or errors to me.

>>For example, we can understand that it¡¯s possible for someone to make mistakes or errors that affect me.

Also we can understand that the person doesn¡¯t want to do these things.

>>Also, we can understand that the person doesn¡¯t intend to do these things.

It is same in my case.

>>It is the same in my case.

I can make a various of mistakes.

>>I can make various mistakes.

It can be happened.

>>It can happen.

However, I will be fine, if I know that it is mistakes when i make it.

>>However, I will be fine if I know that they are mistakes when I make them.

But, i am usually nervous and scared that i can make mistakes

>>But I am usually nervous and scared that I might make mistakes.

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