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I stayed four days in Paris with my friend. There are many attractions looks interesting. Most of the rides are based on their movie theme. My friends and I love not only Disney, but also Marvel movies. For us, all the places were romantic and surprising. At the end of closing time, Mickey mouse said good bye. That was so cute.

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Yeon Hee,

Thanks for sharing your experience. You must have really enjoyed it. =)

I stayed four days in Paris with my friend.
>> I stayed for four days in Paris with my friend.

 There are many attractions looks interesting.
>> There were many interesting attractions.

 Most of the rides are based on their movie theme.
>> Most of the rides were based on a movie theme. 

 My friends and I love not only Disney, but also Marvel movies. 
>> My friend and I love not only Disney, but also Marvel movies. 

For us, all the places were romantic and surprising. 
>> For us, we thought all the places looked romantic and amazing.

At the end of closing time, Mickey mouse said good bye. 
>> At the closing time, Mickey Mouse said "goodbye".

That was so cute.
>>CORRECT
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