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Especially I'm less honest with my parents when we discuss political issues.
We have different political views; My parents have conservative one, and I have progressive one.
So I'm silent when my parents talk about their political opinions watching TV news.

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Hello, Min!

It is great to see you here  again on the composition page. Answering in three sentences is enough to have the introduction, body, and conclusion of a complete paragraph.

As you can see the suggestions I gave you are just word arrangements, pluralization, and lower casing letters in a sentence.

Out of respect, we sometimes have to keep political opinions we have not only to ourselves but also from others. It polarizes people and me might be misunderstood.

You have done so well. See you soon.

-T. Donna~

Especially I'm less honest with my parents when we discuss political issues.
>> Correct!
Or: I am especially less honest with my parents when we discuss political issues.

We have different political views; My parents have conservative one, and I have progressive one.
>> We have different political views; my parents have conservative ones, and I have progressive ones.

So I'm silent when my parents talk about their political opinions watching TV news.
>> Correct!
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