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My feelings when someone has been untruthful to me

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Actually I tend to believe others easily, so I usually trusted what my clients said.
But some clients cheated to appeal to my sympathy, so I felt frustrated after I realized what truth is.

Thus I try to less empathize with my clients because I don't want to hurt by others anymore.

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Hi there again, Min!

Trust is like a broken glass, when we can mend it but it will never be the same. I am certain that by now, you have been more keen in realizing the truth from the fancy lies that your clients tell you. In your work experience serves as the best teacher.

For the grammar pointers of your composition, try to study the syntax or word arrangements well. In addition,  the present tense needs to be consistent if you use it at the start of your paragraph. Nevertheless, your homework was well written and creates a very good meaning.

Thank you.

-T. Donna~

Actually I tend to believe others easily, so I usually trusted what my clients said.
>> Actually I tend to believe others easily, so I usually trust what my clients say.

But some clients cheated to appeal to my sympathy, so I felt frustrated after I realized what truth is.
>> But some clients cheat to appeal to my sympathy, so I felt frustrated after I realized what the truth is.

Thus I try to less empathize with my clients because I don't want to hurt by others anymore.
>> Correct!
Or: Thus I try to empathize less with my clients because I don't want to be hurt by others anymore.
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