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When you¡¯re feeling stressed, what¡¯s your go-to way to relax or take care of yourself?

When I¡¯m feeling stressed, I usually write about something since I read a book.
The book is for kids.
The title may be ¡®Let¡¯s do this when you¡¯re angry.¡¯.
I was very angry to my husband.
He didn¡¯t understand me when I told repeatly again.
I couldn¡¯t relax my mind, but I had to read a book for my son because of sleeping.
I was very empressed that sentence
¡® Let¡¯s write about it, when you¡¯re feeling some depressed¡¯
I feel relax after doing this.
So, I bought a book which is transcription.
I usually write the letters when I¡¯m feeling stressed.


Have a nice day.
See you tommorow. 🤗

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Hi, Stella! I think this is a good way to relieve stress. ^^ I am glad you find it very useful! Thank you for doing your homework! 
~T. Jewel
When I¡¯m feeling stressed, I usually write about something since I read a book.
>>When I¡¯m feeling stressed, I usually write about it after learning this method from a book I read.
The book is for kids.
>>CORRECT
OR
>>It's a children's book.
The title may be ¡®Let¡¯s do this when you¡¯re angry.¡¯.
>>The title might be ¡®Let¡¯s Do This When You¡¯re Angry'.
I was very angry to my husband.
>>Once, I was very angry at my husband.
He didn¡¯t understand me when I told repeatly again.
>>He didn¡¯t understand me when I told him repeatedly.
I couldn¡¯t relax my mind, but I had to read a book for my son because of sleeping.
>>I couldn¡¯t relax my mind, but I had to read a book for my son to help him sleep.
I was very empressed that sentence
>>I was very impressed by a sentence that goes like this.
¡® Let¡¯s write about it, when you¡¯re feeling some depressed¡¯
>>'Let¡¯s write about it when you¡¯re feeling a bit depressed.'
I feel relax after doing this.
>>I feel relaxed after doing this.
So, I bought a book which is transcription.
>>So, I bought a book that is a transcription.
I usually write the letters when I¡¯m feeling stressed.
>>CORRECT
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