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What is the best time of year to visit tourist attractions in your country?

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Nowadays, autumn is the best time of year to visit our country.
The sky is blue and weather is cool with fresh air.
If you visit our country, you can see the leaves are changed yellow and red colors.

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Thank you for sharing this, Anna! ^^ Your country sounds beautiful in autumn, with clear skies, cool weather, and colorful leaves. It seems like the perfect time for a visit, and I would love to experience it myself!
~Kelly^^
Nowadays, autumn is the best time of year to visit our country.
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>> These days, autumn is the best time of the year to visit our country.
The sky is blue and weather is cool with fresh air.
>> The sky is blue, and the weather is cool with fresh air.
If you visit our country, you can see the leaves are changed yellow and red colors.
>> If you visit our country, you can see the leaves changing to yellow and red.
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