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How do you rate the medical system in your country from 1-10, 10 highest? Share your answer in a few

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I think the level of the medical system of South Korea is very high.
I want to rate it as 8 point (10 highest).
Because it is so easy to meet any certified doctors (who are expert in specific majors), and patients don¡¯t need to wait too long for check-up their health.
Moreover, surgeons have very skillful hands, so many doctors from other countries come to our country to see their surgery and learn some tips.
However, since spring this year, many residents and interns quit their job, so there are serious problems in the medical system.
I¡¯m so worried about the quality of the medical system in the future.

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Hello, Dr. David!

Indeed, South Korea is very well admired for its healthcare system and policies with all the stated facts you have mentioned below. On the other hand, the doctor strike put the good system in a bad light. If this issue will be resolved in the future, the ordinary people will benefit the most since they do not have to wait for long appointments for uncertain check up dates. In addition, you will be more comfortable with your working schedule knowing that the interns can help you out in your tasks.

Looking at your sentences below, you wrote correct sentences generally. Be cautious with plural nouns to agree with your plural pronouns. Keep up the good work!

See you in class tomorrow.

-T. Donna~

I think the level of the medical system of South Korea is very high.
>> Correct!

I want to rate it as 8 point (10 highest).
>> I want to rate it as 8 points (10 highest).

Because it is so easy to meet any certified doctors (who are expert in specific majors), and patients don¡¯t need to wait too long for check-up their health.
>> It is so easy to meet any certified doctors (who are experts in specific majors), and patients don¡¯t need to wait too long for check-up for their health.

Moreover, surgeons have very skillful hands, so many doctors from other countries come to our country to see their surgery and learn some tips.
>> Correct! 

However, since spring this year, many residents and interns quit their job, so there are serious problems in the medical system.
>> Correct!

I¡¯m so worried about the quality of the medical system in the future.
>> Correct!
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