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Do you believe that if you help someone, something good will happen to you? Why or why not?

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I believe that if I help someone, something good will happen to me.
Because when I helped someone last time, I felt good on a beginning of a day.
That day, I feel good all day. I can say that something good happened to me!
There is old saying in Korea, 'Gives a little, but takes a lot.'
It means that I give a little something but responser give me more.
I believe this old saying.
Whoever will help me in the future because I helped someone.

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Hello Nicole,
Thank you for sending your composition. Have a great weekend!
~ T. Demi ^^


I believe that if I help someone, something good will happen to me.
>> CORRECT!
Because when I helped someone last time, I felt good on a beginning of a day.
>> Because the last time I helped someone, I felt good at the beginning of my day.
That day, I feel good all day. I can say that something good happened to me!
>> That day, I felt great all day. Something good happened to me.
There is old saying in Korea, 'Gives a little, but takes a lot.
>> There is an old saying in Korea, " Give a little but you will get a lot."
It means that I give a little something but responser give me more.
>> It means that even if I give a little of something, I will receive more"
I believe this old saying.
>> I believe in this old saying.
Whoever will help me in the future because I helped someone.
>> Anyone will help me in the future because I helped someone.
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