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I think South Korea isn\'t ready to accept the queer

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Nowadays some Koreans understand queer easily. But I think South Korea isn't ready to accept the queer.

Recently the new Korean drama, which title is "Jeong-nyeon", is broadcast every weekend.
This drama is based on a popular webtoon of the same name, and tells the story of a Korean women's traditional opera in the 1950s.
There are many kinds of female characters in this drama, but queer character disappears in the drama.
This character was loved by fans of webtoon, so many fans get angry after drama is released.

Also, I told you that the trailer of drama version of "Love in the big city" disappear in the internet.
Because some civil group protested collectively, calling it obscene and glorifying homosexuality.

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Hi there, Min.

It's good to see you again here on the composition page.

Certainly, the concept of queer or the LGBTQ+ is not new to your country. The question is when they are going to be ready to start feeling comfortable about it. In my country, there are laws and policies for the queer. They are not a lot but we have lived with them peacefully overtime.

Since webtoon and Kdrama is one entertaining way of looking or mirroring our lives, some 'puritans' or conservatives may really feel uncomfortable about the idea of watching the queer mainstream. Until today, the issue of accepting queer in society is still polarizing.

Thank you very much for your composition.  I can see very good sentences as well as minute grammatical pointers you need to memorize. Overall, great job!

See you in class.

-T. Donna~

Nowadays some Koreans understand queer easily. But I think South Korea isn't ready to accept the queer.
>> Correct!

Recently the new Korean drama, which title is "Jeong-nyeon", is broadcast every weekend.
>> Correct!
Or: Recently the new Korean drama, which title is "Jeong-nyeon", is (aired/ shown) every weekend.

This drama is based on a popular webtoon of the same name, and tells the story of a Korean women's traditional opera in the 1950s.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

There are many kinds of female characters in this drama, but queer character disappears in the drama.
>> Correct!

This character was loved by fans of webtoon, so many fans get angry after drama is released.
>> This character was loved by fans of webtoon, so many fans got angry after the drama was released.

Also, I told you that the trailer of drama version of "Love in the big city" disappear in the internet.
>> Also, I told you that the trailer of the drama version of "Love in the Big City" disappeared on the internet.

Because some civil group protested collectively, calling it obscene and glorifying homosexuality.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
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