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Would you let your friends visit you all the time in your house? Why or why not?

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I don't let my frirends visit my house all the time.
Because, when I invite my friends to my house that my parents are staying in, I think that both my friends and parents are uncomfortable.
My friends can't hang out with me in usual. And my parents can't take a rest in usual.
So I usually invite my friends when my parents are not in my house.
It's good for not only my friends but my parents.

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Hello Nicole,
Great composition. I hope you pay attention to your spelling as well when writing your homework. 
Other than that, I'm happy with how you constructed your sentences. Keep practicing :)
~ T. Demi ^^

I don't let my frirends visit my house all the time.
>> I don't let my friends visit my house all the time.
Because, when I invite my friends to my house that my parents are staying in, I think that both my friends and parents are uncomfortable.
>> Because I think if I invite them, both my parents and my friends will be uncomfortable with each other.
My friends can't hang out with me in usual. And my parents can't take a rest in usual.
>>My friends are unable to enjoy hanging out with me as usual, and my parents are not getting proper rest.
So I usually invite my friends when my parents are not in my house.
>> So, I usually invite my friends at home when my parents are not around.
It's good for not only my friends but my parents.
>> It's not only good for my friends but with my parents as well.
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