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What might happen if you don’t use any phones in a day, week, month, or year?

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2024-10-22 353

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I think I will be anxious at first. Because it's very inconvenient if I suddenly couldn't use my phone. Especially, I start my daily routine with the 'to do mate' application on my phone. I'm a person who has a habit of recording(or I'm a planner), and there are many to do lists in several categories, including today's to do, schedule, study, and self-development, act. When I sucessed, I check the check box and also records what I did at all of time on Google Calendar. And there are so many things I do with my phone, such as map apps, calendars, alarms, e-book apps, study, and music that are indispensable. However, a day or a week would be fine. If I don't have to contact someone and don't have a team project to do, I can feel fine without a phone. What I do with my phone can replace it with another analog things. Therefore if there's no contact problem, it won't be bad without a phone. Sometimes I want to be free with phone and take a rest peacefully.

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Hi, Lin! It sounds like you have a well-structured routine that relies heavily on your phone! It’s totally normal to feel anxious about being without it, especially since you use it for so many essential tasks. But it’s great to hear that you’re open to the idea of going phone-free for a day or a week. Embracing analog alternatives can be refreshing and might help you find some peace. Remember, taking a break from your phone can also lead to new insights and experiences!
~T. Jenna

I think I will be anxious at first. Because it's very inconvenient if I suddenly couldn't use my phone. 
>>I think I would be anxious at first because it would be very inconvenient if I suddenly couldn't use my phone.
OR
>>I’d probably feel on edge at first since being suddenly cut off from my phone would throw a wrench in things.
Especially, I start my daily routine with the 'to do mate' application on my phone. 
Correct, or
>>I kick off my day with the 'To Do Mate' app on my phone, which helps me organize my routine.
I'm a person who has a habit of recording(or I'm a planner), and there are many to do lists in several categories, including today's to do, schedule, study, and self-development, etc. 
Correct, or
>>I'm someone who enjoys planning and keeping records, with various to-do lists organized into categories like today's tasks, schedule, study, self-development, and more.
When I sucessed, I check the check box and also records what I did at all of time on Google Calendar. 
>>When I succeed, I check the box and also record everything I did on Google Calendar.
And there are so many things I do with my phone, such as map apps, calendars, alarms, e-book apps, study, and music that are indispensable. 
>>And, there are many essential things I do with my phone, such as using map apps, calendars, alarms, e-book apps, studying, and listening to music.
However, a day or a week would be fine.
>> However, going without a phone for a day or even a week would be fine.
OR
>>However, I could easily weather the storm of going without my phone for a day or even a week.
 If I don't have to contact someone and don't have a team project to do, I can feel fine without a phone. 
>> If I don't have to contact someone or have a team project to do, I can feel fine without a phone.
OR
>>If I don't need to reach out to anyone or work on a team project, I can comfortably go without my phone.
What I do with my phone can replace it with another analog things. 
>>What I usually do with my phone can be replaced with other analog alternatives.
OR
>>The activities I typically engage in on my phone can effortlessly be substituted with a range of analog alternatives.
Therefore if there's no contact problem, it won't be bad without a phone. 
>>Therefore, if there's no issue with staying in contact, it wouldn't be too bad to go without a phone.
OR
>>Therefore, as long as staying in touch isn’t a concern, I could easily go off the grid without a phone.
Sometimes I want to be free with phone and take a rest peacefully.
>>Sometimes I just want to be free from my phone and rest peacefully.
OR
>>Sometimes I just want to unplug and enjoy some peace and quiet away from my phone.
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