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What would change if money didn¡¯t exist but people still had to work?

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Yes, anywhere we don't have money if they don't work then we might don't have thing to eat and clothes so they have to do work if money did not exist.

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Hi Sunny!
This is a simpler version of the sentence you wrote.
Review and practice.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Yes, anywhere we don't have money if they don't work then we might don't have thing to eat and clothes so they have to do work if money did not exist.
>> I think people would still have to work because we still need food to eat and clothes to wear.
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