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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Writing task: Are you a hard worker? What motivates you to work?

I think I did but I'm not hard worker as much as before..
I think motivate is recognize. so in the past I was hard worker because I has many greed a promotion and career develop, so I got a new job too.
But since I had a kid, my life has changed.
I focused my kid and famliy than my life(career develop), I began to reduce my greed about promotion or my career develop
But I'm not giving up, I'm goiong to go a little slowly.
And I realized while raising to child, money is important!! lol
Maybe my motivation was money...?

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Hello, Ms. Nala! Thank you for not giving up. I am happy to hear that you are trying to get back gradually. I know you can do it one step at a time. Than you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
I think I did but I'm not hard worker as much as before..
>>I think,  I used to but not as hardworking as I was before.
I think motivate is recognize. 
>>I think, my motivation was recognition.
so in the past I was hard worker because I has many greed a promotion and career develop, so I got a new job too.
>>So, in the  past, I was a hard worker because of my greed for promotion and career development which resulted to getting a new job, too.
But since I had a kid, my life has changed.
>>Correct!
I focused my kid and famliy than my life(career develop), I began to reduce my greed about promotion or my career develop
>>I focused on my kid and family more than my life and career so my greed for those things decreased.
But I'm not giving up, I'm goiong to go a little slowly.
>>But I am not giving up and will gradually get back. 
And I realized while raising to child, money is important!! lol
>>And I realized while raising a child that money is important.
Maybe my motivation was money...?
>>Money might be my current motivation.
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