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My most memorable trip destination is ¡¯New Zealand¡¯

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My most memorable trip destination is ¡¯New Zealand¡¯
Because, I had long trip alone as first time.
My aunt lives in New Zealand so I had trip to there during the 3 weeks.
And I had travel alone of them 1 week.
I took public transportation on trip because I don¡¯t have license.
Luckily, New Zealand public bus was good for traveler.
Maybe, The bus tooks long time on Christchurch (my aunt live here) to Queenstown at the 8 hours.
Anyway, I didn¡¯t bored that bus had a rest and nice view during the move.
The lake ¡®Tekapo¡¯ was particularly beautiful lake.
I¡¯m so sad I didn¡¯t stay there 1 day.
I will trip to there later!

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Thank you for bringing me to New Zealand, Daeun! I think there are still many wondrous things to discover there.-Faith-
My most memorable trip destination is ¡¯New Zealand¡¯ Because, I had long trip alone as first time.
>> My most memorable trip destination is New Zealand because I had a long trip alone for the first time.
My aunt lives in New Zealand so I had trip to there during the 3 weeks.
>> My aunt lives in New Zealand, so I traveled there for three weeks.
And I had travel alone of them 1 week.
>> Also, I had the chance to travel alone for one week.
I took public transportation on trip because I don¡¯t have license.
>> I took public transportation on the trip because I don¡¯t have a license.
Luckily, New Zealand public bus was good for traveler.
>> Luckily, the public buses in New Zealand are good for travelers.
Maybe, The bus tooks long time on Christchurch (my aunt live here) to Queenstown at the 8 hours.
>> Maybe the bus takes a long time from Christchurch, where my aunt lives, to Queenstown, about eight hours.
Anyway, I didn¡¯t bored that bus had a rest and nice view during the move.
>> Anyway, I was not bored because the bus had rest stops and nice views during the journey.
The lake ¡®Tekapo¡¯ was particularly beautiful lake.
>> Lake Tekapo was particularly beautiful.
I¡¯m so sad I didn¡¯t stay there 1 day.
>> I was so sad that I did not stay there for one more day.
I will trip to there later!
>> I will travel there again later!
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