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right to protect celebrities\' private lives.

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2024-10-17 466

회원님의 영작문

Recently, right of celebrities to have their own private life has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that celebrities can enjoy their private lives and it's their rights, and others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to repute the idea that entertainers' privacy have to be protected. Perhaps the compelling reason is that they are just a person like us, and it's not their obligation to show all aspects of their lives. For this reason, there does seem to be a solid basis for several arguments in favour of safeguarding their privacy.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that we shouldn't invade their private lives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that the public have a right to know all aspects of their lives.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Ms. Casey! I believe that it could be inevitable for celebrities to not lose their privacy. Though, there are instances wherein it also depends on the personal preference of the celebrity. 
-T. Sonny
Recently, right of celebrities to have their own private life has become the subject of heated debate. 
>>Recently, the right of celebrities to have their privacy has become the subject of a heated debate. 
Some people assert that celebrities can enjoy their private lives and it's their rights, and others argue otherwise.
>>Some people assert that celebrities should be able to enjoy their private lives and that it's their right, but others argue otherwise.
Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. 
>>Correct!
In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
>>Correct!
On the one hand, it seems difficult to repute the idea that entertainers' privacy have to be protected. 
>>On one hand, it seems difficult to repute the idea that entertainers' privacy have to be protected. 
Perhaps the compelling reason is that they are just a person like us, and it's not their obligation to show all aspects of their lives. 
>>One compelling reason is that they are just like us, and it's not their obligation to show all aspects of their lives.
For this reason, there does seem to be a solid basis for several arguments in favour of safeguarding their privacy.
>>For this reason, there does seem to be a solid basis for several arguments in favor of safeguarding their privacy.       
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that we shouldn't invade their private lives. 
>>Correct!
The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that the public have a right to know all aspects of their lives.
>>The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that the public has a right to know all aspects of their lives.

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