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Hi teacher Divina.
Sorry, I suddenly cancel in my class because I am suddeny catched to promise with my large familys
Good night teacher! See you tomorrow!
Homework
What should foreigers know about Korea?
My answer
They should know the capital and the best place in Korea and they should know informations of the place that they would like to go to it

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Hi, Jae Hyeon!

Thank you for answering your homework. See you in our next class!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some corrections:

1. Sorry, I suddenly cancel in my class because I am suddeny catched to promise with my large familys
>>Sorry if I suddenly canceled my class because I needed to catch up to my promise with my large family.

2. They should know the capital and the best place in Korea and they should know informations of the place that they would like to go to it
>>They should know the capital and the best place in Korea, as well as the information of the place that they would like to go to.

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