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Is it better to focus on developing good habits or breaking bad habits? Why?

>>> Although Both things are surely important, it is better for me to focus on breaking bad habits. Because I want to be close with an ideal man and ideal man of respect that I want to be has no flaw. If there is a person who has powerful strength but also has bad habit, that person may not be respected by all people. But who dosen't have any bad habits will be well liked by everyone, if not respected. Because I don't want to be blamed by anyone, I want to reduce my number of bad habits.

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Hi, Jun!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille


Is it better to focus on developing good habits or breaking bad habits? Why?

>>> Although both things are surely important, it is better for me to focus on breaking bad habits.
>> CORRECT!
Because I want to be close with an ideal man and ideal man of respect that I want to be has no flaw. 
>> That's because I want to be close with an ideal man, and an ideal man of respect that I want to be has no flaw. 
If there is a person who has powerful strength but also has bad habits, that person may not be respected by all people. 
>> CORRECT!
But who dosen't have any bad habits will be well liked by everyone, if not respected. 
>> But who doesn't have any bad habits will be well liked by everyone, if not respected. 
Because I don't want to be blamed by anyone, I want to reduce my number of bad habits.
>> CORRECT!

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