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1. What are the rules you usually break?
A) Before I go to bed every day, I organize the rules I have to do tomorrow.
However, I can't keep about half of it.
It's not a social law, it's a law I set myself.

2. What do you do after learning that you did something wrong?
A) I have that experience.
I did something socially reprehensible, but no one knew.
I went to the police station by myself and admitted my mistake.
But no one punished me for that.
I didn't want to be a shameful father to my two daughters.

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Hi David,

Great job on answering the questions! To improve, try adding more detail and examples to show a deeper understanding. Also, keep your answers focused and consider offering more of your own analysis where possible. Keep up the good work!

Regards, 
Teacher Dana


1. What are the rules you usually break?

A) Before I go to bed every day, I organize the rules I have to do tomorrow.
>>>Before I go to bed each day, I organize the rules or tasks I need to follow for the next day.

However, I can't keep about half of it.
>>>CORRECT or However, I usually only manage to follow about half of them.

It's not a social law, it's a law I set myself.
>>>They aren¡¯t social rules, but personal ones I set for myself.

2. What do you do after learning that you did something wrong?
A) I have that experience.
>>>I¡¯ve experienced this before

I did something socially reprehensible, but no one knew.
>>>I had done something socially wrong, but no one knew about it.

I went to the police station by myself and admitted my mistake.
>>>CORRECT

But no one punished me for that.
>>>CORRECT or combine it with the previous sentence.

I didn't want to be a shameful father to my two daughters.
>>>CORRECT
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