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How can we show everyone is equal?

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Uhm..I understand your question as being about that we are equal and how we can strive to achieve that.

First, I think that our unfair society have to take the fair opportunities for everyone and for every parts( like education, job, welfare and so on).
And, we by ourself can make wonderful global society. For that, we use inclusive expressions regardless of race, gender, age, background, religion etc.
Also, if we look discrimination, we should speak out directly against discrimination situation based on biases and prejudices.
Above all, we have to get a respect for anybody.

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Hello, Seo Yeon!~
I can hear your cheerful voice while reading your composition. Thank you for sharing it ^^ As they say, if you accept others, they will accept you for who you are. This means that equality must begin within.
Chammy
I understand your question as being about that we are equal and how we can strive to achieve that.
>>I understand your question about equality and how we can strive to achieve that.
First, I think that our unfair society have to take the fair opportunities for everyone and for every parts( like education, job, welfare and so on).
>> First, I think that our unfair society has to provide fair opportunities for everyone and every part such as education, jobs, welfare, and so on.
And, we by ourself can make wonderful global society. For that, we use inclusive expressions regardless of race, gender, age, background, religion etc.
>>And, we by ourselves can make a wonderful global society. For that, we use inclusive expressions regardless of race, gender, age, background, religion, etc
Also, if we look discrimination, we should speak out directly against discrimination situation based on biases and prejudices.
>>Also, if we look at discrimination, we should speak out directly against discrimination situations based on biases and prejudices.
Above all, we have to get a respect for anybody.
>> Above all, we have to have respect for anybody.
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