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What is the best age to travel? Why?

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NOW! I like my age because I have a lot of time , save money to travel and can go wherever I want. When I was young, I had no money and no time. So I want to travel a lot.

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Hi, Lily!
I agree with you! Time and money are two important things to consider when traveling. Young people may have time but not enough money, and older people might have the money but lack time. So it's really nice that you have both right now!
- T. Caitlyn 
NOW! 
>> CORRECT
I like my age because I have a lot of time , save money to travel and can go wherever I want. 
>> I like my age because I have a lot of time, saved money for traveling, and I can go wherever I want.
When I was young, I had no money and no time. 
>> CORRECT
So I want to travel a lot.
>> CORRECT  
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