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Scary things

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2024-10-11 548

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Actually, there are many things that I'm scared of. Because I'm coword. But characteristics of them are really different.
The majority of humanity may don't like this existence or be afraid of this one. It's a ghost. Usually, I don't concentrate on that existence so deeply or sometimes I definitely forget likelihood that they can be in this room in daily life. But, scary movies make me feel afraid of their existence! To be more specific, really scary thing is how to describe them in movie(high volume of sound effect, strange atmosphere...etc), not a ghost. My mom have seen a ghost(it's not a lie!) sometimes, and told me that they don't have any willingness to harm people. So I can lessen a negative emotion to them.
In addition, this is the most scary thing in my life. It's a death. When I was 20, I had a death phobia. I considered that everting is meaningless, and life of human is too short to enjoy many things. This nihilism put me in a bad state at that time.(not now!)

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Hello, Ms. Casey! I, too, am terrified of death and there are times when I overthink things and even have a hard time sleeping. It's something that we cannot control and is inevitable which is why it is more terrifying. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny 
Actually, there are many things that I'm scared of. 
>>Honestly, there are many things that I'm scared of.
Because I'm coword. 
>>That's because I am a coward.
But characteristics of them are really different.
>>But their characteristics are completely different from each other.
The majority of humanity may don't like this existence or be afraid of this one. 
>>The majority of humanity may not like their existence or may even become terrified of them.
It's a ghost. 
>>I'm talking about ghosts.
Usually, I don't concentrate on that existence so deeply or sometimes I definitely forget likelihood that they can be in this room in daily life. 
>>I don't usually immerse myself in their existence so deeply and sometimes, I even forget the likelihood that they can be in my room anytime.
But, scary movies make me feel afraid of their existence! 
>>Correct!
To be more specific, really scary thing is how to describe them in movie(high volume of sound effect, strange atmosphere...etc), not a ghost. 
>>To be more specific, what makes them so terrifying is how they are presented in movies with loud sound effects, creepy atmosphere, and so on, and not them alone. 
My mom have seen a ghost(it's not a lie!) sometimes, and told me that they don't have any willingness to harm people. 
>>My mom has seen a ghost (it's not a lie!) and told me that they don't have any intention of harming people.
So I can lessen a negative emotion to them.
>>So, I can alleviate all the negative emotions I have toward them.
In addition, this is the most scary thing in my life.
>>In addition, this, I think is what I'm scared of the most in life. 
It's a death. 
>>It's death.
When I was 20, I had a death phobia. 
>>Correct!
I considered that everting is meaningless, and life of human is too short to enjoy many things. 
>>I realized everything is meaningless, and the life of humans is too short to enjoy many things. 
This nihilism put me in a bad state at that time.(not now!)
>>This nihilism had put me in a bad state at that time. (not now!)

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